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Can you please helping me with English letter?

Hello. My name is Akemi. Could you please fix letter for me? Hello Tayla Smith How are you? Is your family healthy? Thankyou for lovely stay in your home. I learn so much about Australia and Australian culture. My english is improving but I am no fluent yet. Australia school is very different to Japan school. You and the students was very nice and make me feel so welcome to school and the country. One day, you will come Japan for stay. You very welcome come to Japan. I will be very excited. We will go to many restraunt and eat Japanese food together. In envelope is gift from my family to yours and some pictures from my stay. There are pictures from the beach and the school. I show my friend pictures from stay and they say "Wow, is very different in Australia, isn't it?" They are very jealous of Australia ^_^ Love Akemi Please help me fix letter. Sorry for extremely poor english. I wish I could speak better. Thankyou

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1. Okay so here are some corrections: Thank you for THE lovely say in your home. I LEARNED so much about Australia and Australian culture My English is improving but I am NOT fluent yet. AUSTRALIAN school is very different to JAPANESE school. You and the students WERE very nice and MADE me feel so welcome AT school AUSTRALIA. We will go to many RESTRUANTS and eat Japanese food together. "Wow, IT is very different in Australia, isn't it? The words capitalized are the changes...
2. Copy the entire letter, as I have re-written it. Hello Tayla Smith How are you? Is your family healthy? Thank you for the lovely stay in your home. I am learning so much about Australia and Australian culture. My English is improving but, I am not fluent yet. Australian schools are very different to Japanese schools. You and the students were very nice and made me feel so welcome to the school and the country. One day, you will come to Japan for a visit. You are very welcome to come to Japan. I will be very excited. We will go to many restaurants and eat Japanese food together. In the envelope is a gift from my family to yours. Along with some pictures from my visit. There are pictures from the beach and the school. I showed my friend pictures from my visit. They said "Wow, It is very different in Australia, isn't it?" They are very jealous of Australia. Love Akemi Just don't make her eat sushi.
3. Hello Tayla Smith, How are you? Is your family healthy? Thankyou for the lovely stay in your home. I have learned so much about Australia and your culture. My English is improving but I am not fluent yet. Australian school is very different to Japanese school. You and the students were very nice and make me feel so welcome to school and the country. One day, you will come Japan for a stay. You would be very welcome to come to Japan. I would be very excited. We will go to many restaurants and eat Japanese food together. In this envelope there is gift from my family to yours and some pictures from my stay. There are pictures from the beach and the school. I showed my friends the pictures from stay and they say "Wow, it is very different in Australia, isn't it?" They are very jealous of Australia ^_^ Love Akemi Your english is fine :) I am sure she would understand.
4. Hello Tayla Smith How are you? Is your family healthy? Thank you for lovely stay in your home. I learned so much about Australia and Australian culture. My english is improving but I am not fluent yet. Australian school is very different to Japan school. You and the students were very nice and made me feel so welcome to the school and the country. One day, you will come to Japan to stay. You're very welcome to come to Japan. I will be very excited. We will go to many restaurants and eat Japanese food together. In envelope there is gift from my family to yours and some pictures from my stay. There are pictures from the beach and the school. I showed my friend pictures from stay and they say "Wow, is very different in Australia, isn't it?" They are very jealous of Australia ^_^ Love Akemi
5. Basically you are cheating yourself and her. She would probably enjoy a letter in broken novelty English like your original, more than a well polished letter written by an internet user.
6. Hello Tayla Smith, How are you doing? Is your family doing well? Thank you for lovely stay in your home. I learned so much about Australia and Australian culture. My english is improving but I am not fluent yet. Australian schools are very different than Japan school. You and the students were very nice and made me feel so welcome to school and the country. One day, you can come to Japan for a stay. You're very welcome to come to Japan. I will be very excited. We will go to many restraunts and eat Japanese food together, and I can teach you about Japanese cultures. In the envelope attatched is a gift from my family to yours, and some pictures from my stay. There are pictures from the beach and the school. I showed my friend pictures from stay and they said, "Wow, is very different in Australia, isn't it?" They are very jealous of Australia ^_^ Once again, thank you for the wonderful trip! Love, Akemi